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i'm built on broken bones and metronomes
her alto trills, his hollow tones
a second verse she'll never know
so sweet and sweet and down we go

the cords stretch and scratch but never match
the off beat tears he'll surely catch
the droplets lead a song of their own
recorded on heartstrings, a song i know

his words they ring and the hurt they bring
it's been so long but i choose to sing
and maybe he'll hear the music we make
( it's been so long but i choose to break. )
:iconkiirohi:
i'm sick and my mind is on music and a inner fight to continue writing a little story of mine.

edit: oh my gosh, i am speechless. thank you so much for the D.D (it's my first) :iconloveloveplz:
edit2: I AM OVERFLOWING WITH EMOTION. Thank you all SO much for your kind words and favorites.
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~Adonael Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Found this through the features but only just realised it made DD as well. Congratulations!

I really enjoyed the rhythm of it - iambic quadrameter??
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~Kiirohi Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! And I wish I could say I went through a lot of planning for this, but I just went with what felt/sounded right. ^^;
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:iconadonael:
~Adonael Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. To be fair, it's often the best way.
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`dreamsinstatic Mar 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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~Kiirohi Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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`dreamsinstatic Mar 23, 2013  Professional Writer
You're welcome.
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~NonsenseQueen Feb 9, 2013  Student Writer
lovely. truly lovely. (but i caught a typo; i belive it is chords in music, but perhaps you did mean cords...)
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~Kiirohi Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ah yes, I did mean cords. :D It was with vocal cords in mind.
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:iconsosolaphie:
Beautiful <3
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~DarkerHours Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Damn, it made me cry.
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